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I stand here
basking in the cotton-candy wisps of clouds
as my gaze falls down
with the stars
cascading me in their light
and I ask when the snow will fall
I get the answer
"Always"

Standing
with my face to the new moon
as my lungs fill
with what I once heard referred to
'the breath of the Earth'
and I ask the sky
how long will the wind blow?
the answer:
"Always"

Here I stand
face to face with my own heart
and I ask questions that I've known from the start
'how does blood flow'
'where are you'
'why do you thrum so fast'

and finally
the most important one
'did you know…'
"Always"

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This one... is something I think has been floating in my head for awhile. ...Beauty and just a hint of tragedy as the answer comes 'round.

That last question is for you to fill in. Each relationship (platonic as well as romantic) is its own. Each person has different experiences in that field.

Let me know what you think.

StarryNight

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:iconinthestarrynightsky:
Thank you very much. :aww:
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:icona7xfan666:
You're welcome :D
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:iconthehiddenpath:
~thehiddenpath Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is really very beautiful. Wow.... Just wow.... That was a perfect use of repetition.
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:iconinthestarrynightsky:
Thank you very much. :aww: I'm glad you liked it.
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:iconanonymous-yet-again:
i like the openness of the last question, and the way it seems like anyone can relate to any part of this.
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:iconinthestarrynightsky:
Thank you! :aww: I am glad that you like it.
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~alankster Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
This was a beautiful poem, especially with your rich use of imagery and sensory details. Also, the "always" gained power like an avalanche every time it was repeated. Thanks for the great piece!
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:iconinthestarrynightsky:
Thank you. It seems like that my intent with the 'always' was able to become visible in the poem itself. :aww:
Thank you for the great comment! :)
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`lintu47 Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello :wave:
You have been featured in my weekly dA love for everyone! article.
Have a nice day :huggle:
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